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Footprints

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When you walk,
does the earth tremble and break away—
It’s tectonic plates forming voluptuous mountains
in the hearts of others?
Do you leave footprints in the sand,
or kick up dust in alleyways—
in places no one takes the time to look?
If I pressed your footprints back into unrecognizable earth,
what would happen?

Would you tremble and shake?
Would your mind implode upon itself
like an interruption of thought?
Would the dust you kicked up
be lost to the crooks and crannies of time?

Maybe, instead,
you’ll simply cease to exist.
Washed away upon the shore
like nothing more
than footprints in the sand.

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This is really amazing! The way you took the inner thought of many of us and put them into words. I really love the way you used the thought of life existence, it really leaves an open field for the readers to play with and to think about! Overall this is extremely well thought out and in such short words it is simply beautiful that you could place such an extreme thought in such few words. I love this and the way you wrote it using questions was nice to have for others to answer them themselves. You did an amazing job on this and I love it as I'm sure others do too!!